Missing You

The clock ticks through the silence of your absence.
I close my eyes and feel your arms enfold me.

* * * * * * * * * *

I have this afternoon just come back to “polish” the above stone that I posted this morning. (Are we allowed to do that?) I have changed one word – around has become enfold, which I think is an improvement, I hope you agree.

When I write a poem I go back to it time and again over a period of weeks and change a word here and there before I decide it is done. These small stones written freshly for each day are more spontaneous and are denied that luxury.

6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Lisa
    Jan 08, 2011 @ 13:48:52

    I am not a poet. I don’t begin to understand poetry. But I read this poem at least 50 times and like a chime in my head all I kept thinking was…if I stop winding the clock will I stop loving him?

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    • Libby
      Jan 08, 2011 @ 14:48:22

      Thank you. I’m glad you got so much from it. I’m about to “polish” it slightly now, I hope you think the change is an improvement.

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  3. Sam Pennington
    Jan 08, 2011 @ 20:51:29

    It’s a beautiful piece, Libby, really moving.

    I have to admit I never let myself post anything right away. I always want to fiddle around once the dust has settled. No matter how good I thought it was at the time, it’s never right when I go back to it.

    Sam x

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    • Libby
      Jan 09, 2011 @ 10:17:36

      Good advice and I do indeed save some for a few days of polishing or to choose the right moment, though some would say the polishing is never finished and by waiting you miss the moment. It’s all a question of balance and hard to get right! I’m pleased you enjoyed the piece.

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  4. Beth
    Jan 10, 2011 @ 17:14:59

    Better late than never, but this just perfectly captures the ache of missing someone and the comfort from imagining them close by again. The ‘enfold’ – really wonderful.

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